Flash Friday Fiction – “Pain”

For today’s Flash! Friday Challenge, we were given 140-160 words, the historic photo below, and the direct order to include the concept of war.  So here we go – back into this weekly word war that truly is a fight to the finish!



1896 Olympic marathon. Public domain photo by Burton Holmes.




“Pain is deception!” Luka’s coach had barked. Now he clung to those words as his feet pounded the dirt once again.

He willed his screaming muscles to fall into a steady rhythm, carrying him one more step… one more step…

His beloved city of Serres lay in ruins, causing his heart to ache far more than his feet. Greece claimed to be a neutral territory in this cursed World War, but that hadn’t stopped the Bulgarians from invading their borders.

“I feel like hunting,” one soldier had said. “Go dogs!” And as he fired his rifle, Luka had obeyed.

What the Bulgarians didn’t know was that Luka was fast – fast enough to compete in the 1896 Olympic Games – and that his hunting rifle was buried a mere twenty yards away.

By the time they took chase, he was ready. They screamed as the first soldier fell, crying for mercy. So much pain…

But pain is deception.

Luka fired again.





Spiritual Reflection:


As long as we fight the daily battles of this earthly life, pain (physical, spiritual, and emotional) will be an ever-present reality.  But won’t it be wonderful to reach Heaven’s gates, and wave goodbye to pain forever?   Now that’s something to look forward to!



“He will wipe away every tear from their eyes; and there will no longer be any death; there will no longer be any mourning, or crying, or pain; the first things have passed away.”

Revelation 21:4

10 thoughts on “Flash Friday Fiction – “Pain”

  1. Another great little flash story! I don’t know how you do it! Beginning, middle, end, plot, backstory….all in so few words. Kudos to you and I really think you should enter some flash fiction contests. You’d stand an excellent chance. This seems to be your forte.


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